tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5929885462293344093.post6550145238174927861..comments2024-03-22T13:08:07.977-07:00Comments on Margo Kelly: BLOGFEST: New CreationsMargo Kellyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13474612650116392270noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5929885462293344093.post-42101429364784761392011-01-07T09:10:40.978-08:002011-01-07T09:10:40.978-08:00Ooh the first sentence could be sardonic or charmi...Ooh the first sentence could be sardonic or charming Your second setence is also very intriguing. :O)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5929885462293344093.post-37477625521022271452011-01-06T08:49:00.817-08:002011-01-06T08:49:00.817-08:00Intrigue and tension spin in both sentences! It fe...Intrigue and tension spin in both sentences! It feels like they go together?<br /><br />Nice to meet you, Margo!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5929885462293344093.post-3605255551980379472011-01-06T07:04:13.443-08:002011-01-06T07:04:13.443-08:00It's all right to end a story with a quote. Re...It's all right to end a story with a quote. Remember the end of GONE WITH THE WIND?<br /><br />Clarissa is right : I want to know what he is thinking when he is spinning the pocket knife. Thanks for visiting my blog, RolandRoland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5929885462293344093.post-32691192987562581182011-01-06T06:21:51.412-08:002011-01-06T06:21:51.412-08:00What I like about this blogfest is how much it mak...What I like about this blogfest is how much it makes me want to read the book that follows the first line. <br /><br />What does he do with the pocket knife?<br />Is he going to kill someone?<br /><br />Super!<br />CDAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12160669603997465454noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5929885462293344093.post-90864660453260041912011-01-06T06:19:19.558-08:002011-01-06T06:19:19.558-08:00Nice job, Margo! The Script is a great band.Nice job, Margo! The Script is a great band.Elena Solodowhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03037029195682225565noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5929885462293344093.post-74939653131657028822011-01-05T16:38:07.558-08:002011-01-05T16:38:07.558-08:00Your last sentence- That's a song I really lik...Your last sentence- That's a song I really like! your new sentence sounds like a good revision. Happy writing and thank you Fairy much for participating~Summer Rosshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08122694893668693244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5929885462293344093.post-84227362008602658822011-01-05T15:29:44.410-08:002011-01-05T15:29:44.410-08:00Hi
I came over from Summer's blogfest!
I lik...Hi<br /><br />I came over from Summer's blogfest!<br /><br />I like your last sentence - I'm intrigued!<br /><br />And your first sentence speaks volumes! There's a sense of foreboding brewing nicely!<br /><br />Take care<br />xOld Kittyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13185547869183611159noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5929885462293344093.post-18938621447087272802011-01-05T14:36:51.930-08:002011-01-05T14:36:51.930-08:00I like that you ended a story with a quote - diffe...I like that you ended a story with a quote - different and intriguing. <br /><br />Great new line, which left wanting to ask many questions. Why is Luke brooding and what does he plan to do with the pocket knife?Ellie Garratthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03731071128348213067noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5929885462293344093.post-80442300902813774742011-01-05T14:20:12.346-08:002011-01-05T14:20:12.346-08:00Wow . . . spinning a pocket knife with his index f...Wow . . . spinning a pocket knife with his index finger. You have my mind going a thousands different ways with that.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10736441732672508192noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5929885462293344093.post-76082037600797371662011-01-05T13:17:38.461-08:002011-01-05T13:17:38.461-08:00Hiya Margo,from Margo...thanks for stopping by my ...Hiya Margo,from Margo...thanks for stopping by my blog today. Your first sentence is full of emotion and one senses th relief after tension. Your second is much more brooding, I think it's the 'methodically' that's so gripping.Margo Bensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06759845391358543223noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5929885462293344093.post-50596420558922818832011-01-05T12:10:16.396-08:002011-01-05T12:10:16.396-08:00Hi,
1) Sentimental and compassionate slant: intr...Hi,<br /><br />1) Sentimental and compassionate slant: intrigued re The Script!<br /><br />2) Ooh, kid spinning a penknife kind of intriguing: boredom, frustration, plotting, maybe? "Just William" springs to mind. ;)<br /><br />best<br />FFrancine Howarthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02326542867876257042noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5929885462293344093.post-79675186881295214782011-01-05T11:44:18.729-08:002011-01-05T11:44:18.729-08:00Okay - here's mine since I didn't formally...Okay - here's mine since I didn't formally due the blogfest:<br /><br />last line - "I smile, lost in the endless blue ocean of her eyes."<br /><br />first line - "There are so many things I could have remembered from that night."<br />Visist anytime! http://christinefonseca.wordpress.comChristine Fonsecahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16986034666903054819noreply@blogger.com