Friday, March 25, 2011

Crusader Challenge #2: Micro-Flash Fiction

Ha - - wasn't sure I'd be able to get this challenge done in time! But here it is, a super short story in less than 100 words.

A FRIEND FOR SABBATH

The goldfish bowl teetered when Sabbath, a giant black Newfoundland, slammed into the table. His paws found no grip on the hardwood floors. Water from the bowl sloshed up and out, but the bowl settled, the fish safe.  Sabbath pulled long scratches into the floor with his nails as he launched in the other direction, determined to catch his new friend. Foamy drool dripped from his tongue as he barreled across the room after him, but Sabbath crashed into the leather sofa as the Chihuahua jumped up. The Chihuahua smiled as he rode the couch across the room.


24 comments:

  1. Great entry. You barely made the deadline. Now if you win, I shall shake my fist at you and mutter "curses!" :))

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  2. Haha! Great last line Margo! And an excellent and fun entry!

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  3. Great piece! I love the description to it.

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  4. Great visual descriptions. After seeing my dogs play, I can completely imagine this, foamy drool and all!

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  5. Great descriptions. I cannot help but cringe at the damage to the floor, though. I guess that is why I am a cat person instead of a dog person.

    Good work!

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  6. I agree about the descriptions. Nicely done!

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  7. Haha, loved the Chihuahua riding the couch at the end. Good job. :)

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  8. nice one - and not about fish - I can just picture dogs and chaos

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  9. Like the imagery at the end with the dog sailing on the couch. Oh, the clean up!

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  10. Awww- Sabbath!!! Loved this. I really liked the Chihuahua riding the couch. Hee!

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  11. Margo, I gave you an award! :)

    http://thefarseas.blogspot.com/2011/03/lovely-blogger-award-woo.html

    Love your Crusader entry :D the chihuaha is CRAFTY!

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  12. Awww... so cute! I love this one and it has very solid writing =)

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  13. This is a wonderful flash piece! Great description and great fun!

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  14. I really love this. THe name of the dog caught my immediate attention. I also have the image of both dogs, the nails scrabbling on the floor and the "ride on the sofa." Well done. Made me laugh.

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  15. Nothing better than a dog's smile. Great description!

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  16. Hi Margo, You've been shortlisted as one of the top five in the judging round, yay!
    Catherine

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  17. I am pleased to tell you Margo that you are a finalist in the judging round whoot whoot!

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  18. Puppies and chaos. Sounds like my house. Great entry. I loved your description of the action.

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  19. Hey Margo, just saw this made the list of finalist for the challenge! Even though it didn't win, I think it's a huge honor to be among the last few selected. (There were tons of entries--and so many great ones too!)

    Anywho, just want to say congrats and good job!

    EJ

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  20. Thanks everyone! Fun challenge!

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